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amother
Floralwhite
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Sun, Feb 25 2018, 10:13 pm
She stared at the ground,
eyes wide
There it was.
A mass of rumpled, velvety feathers
The angle looked all wrong,
distorted somehow.
Like a paper bag collapsed
in on itself.
The tiny beak opened slightly
In an almost cry.
Two liquid eyes beamed pain
from their small depths
Meeting hers
for just a moment
She bowed her head,
turning away.
It was too late for the little bird.
For you see,
it had tried to fly
And it had broken
its wings
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amother
Floralwhite
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Sun, Feb 25 2018, 10:47 pm
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amother
Orchid
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Mon, Feb 26 2018, 1:47 am
Such a sad poem. Concise and beautifully written. What does it represent for you?
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amother
Floralwhite
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Mon, Feb 26 2018, 2:25 am
amother wrote: | Such a sad poem. Concise and beautifully written. What does it represent for you? |
Thanks. It's kind of me looking at myself broken on the ground. Trying to fly = be competent in life, and failing miserably.
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amother
Saddlebrown
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Mon, Feb 26 2018, 2:39 am
Oof gozal
Chatoch et hashayim
Tus l'an
She ba lecha
Rak al tishkach
Yesh nesher bashamayim
Gur lecha.
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amother
Saddlebrown
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Mon, Feb 26 2018, 2:44 am
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amother
Floralwhite
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Mon, Feb 26 2018, 2:45 am
amother wrote: | Oof gozal
Chatoch et hashayim
Tus l'an
She ba lecha
Rak al tishkach
Yesh nesher bashamayim
Gur lecha. |
Another bird, another parable...what are you trying to say?
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amother
Saddlebrown
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Mon, Feb 26 2018, 2:46 am
amother wrote: | Another bird, another parable...what are you trying to say? |
Remember there is an "eagle" (Hashem) in heaven. Then you can fly.
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amother
Floralwhite
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Mon, Feb 26 2018, 2:49 am
I listened. Thanks for sharing, it's a beautiful song.
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amother
Floralwhite
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Mon, Feb 26 2018, 2:52 am
amother wrote: | Remember there is an "eagle" (Hashem) in heaven. Then you can fly. |
Interesting! I thought the lyrics were cautioning the chick to beware the predators that might snatch it.
I like your perspective. Sometimes it still feels like a crushing defeat, though...
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amother
Saddlebrown
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Mon, Feb 26 2018, 4:16 am
When I read your poem my immediate reaction was the chorus (with my different interpretation) (but not the verses) of that song.
Someone who knows Hebrew better than me may find my interpretation makes no sense, but I say Shira is poetry and you can read it however you want.
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