Help with writing a poem

amother

Bronze

Sun, Sep 22 2019, 12:19 am

I don't know your parents, but I know people in general.

Most people appreciate a heartfelt note in your own words more than the most eloquent poem written by someone else for you.

amother

Babypink

Sun, Sep 22 2019, 12:24 am

amother [ Bronze ] wrote:

I don't know your parents, but I know people in general.

Most people appreciate a heartfelt note in your own words more than the most eloquent poem written by someone else for you.

This, a thousand times. Say what you want to say.

You're not under pressure to produce a masterpiece. "Thanks for having us for Yom tov and for always being there for us," is fine. Or whatever. That's far better than a juvenile rhyme written by a stranger.

amother

Bronze

Sun, Sep 22 2019, 12:28 am

amother [ OP ] wrote:

I honestly dont know how to write for the life of me. I go blank when I have to write anything even from my heart.

Your love language is clearly not words of affirmation Smile

I hear you.

If you're going for heartfelt, though, go for a letter, not a poem - especially not a rhyming one.

amother

cornflower

Sun, Sep 22 2019, 12:41 am

Agree with the above.
I do know how to write (somewhat, not on a professional level). I’ve written poems for teachers for Purim and the likes when the thought of giving was what counted. But when I wanted to properly express my appreciation it was always in the form of a letter. Simply writing that which is on my mind is generally enough. The reactions have always been a lot more emotional and appreciative. My poems always got - it was so well written compliments. My letters tend to get more sincere reactions.
Just write something along the lines of as another year draws to a close, I’d like to reflect on all that you have done for us in the last 365 days. You’ve... and be specific.

amother

Orange

Sun, Sep 22 2019, 2:13 am

Upon the new year, I'd like to wish you
A Kesiva Vchasima Tova,
A Gut Gebentched yahr.

At this time of year, we want to show our sincere appreciation
For your outstanding devotion
We want you to know
The effort you put in definitely does show!
Parents like YOU are hard to find,
Being so caring and kind!
Now that another the year is gone,
We want you to know, we are forever grateful for all you've done.

May this year bring much Hatzlacha, Brocha...

May you be zoche and blessed with a year of Health, wealth, prosperity, lot of Yiddish Nachas from all children.
And all you wish for yourself Ltova.

(You can elaborate more on what they have done for you, in what way you appreciate them.)

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amother

Seagreen

Sun, Sep 22 2019, 2:30 am

amother [ OP ] wrote:

I want to give a gift to my parents for yt and I need help writing a really nice poem. Does anyone know who does this?

What do you want the poem to say?
What is the gift?
Do you want there to be a connection?

To be honest, a family photo with a note that says "Shana Tova from the _____ family, we love you so much!" is more than enough.

If you want something more flowery or emotional, think about what points you want to make. Someone may be able to put those into nice words or a poem.

During Elul, we make a cheshbon
Of the things we've done all year.
It also brings back recollections
Of times we've spent with those most dear.

Mommy and Tatty, through thick and thin
You've always been there at our side.
And sharing happy times with you
Has made our own joy multiplied.

This small gift, we hope will show
Without you we feel incomplete.
With all our hearts, we'd like to wish
A year that's only good and sweet.

amother

Orchid

Sun, Sep 22 2019, 9:26 am

I happen to disagree with the posters saying a poem is juvenile/not sincere.
It depends what it's for and how it's written.
I do believe it should be written specifically for the occasion. Not generic.
I've recently started writing poems(yes they do rhyme) and I've been told many times it made people cry.

greenfire

Sun, Sep 22 2019, 10:51 am

if you yourself are not a poet, just write something from your heart ... pretty sure your mother knows you cannot write ...

alternatively find a poem from an already famous writer & print it alongside your own thoughts

ssspectacular

Sun, Sep 22 2019, 10:57 am

amother [ Babypink ] wrote:

Not true!

A talented writer can produce a poem that is both eloquent and heartfelt.

thunderstorm

Sun, Sep 22 2019, 1:43 pm

I write poems as well, for a living. I have written very personal poems for people and I have received lots of feedback that people have saved my poems for years because they were so touched by the words. Words have a lasting impression, including those written in a poetic format.