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[STORY] Damsel in Distress (Update #15b - 14 Teves p. 22)
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farmom




 
 
    
 

Post Thu, Dec 30 2021, 6:16 am
I love this chapter! Real life, real working through issues

I'll admit the ending has me a bit panicked.

Hope the continuation comes soon!
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Hidden




 
 
    
 

Post Thu, Dec 30 2021, 8:06 am
Oh no!!!

OP, you better update this one real quick!! šŸ˜‚
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PinkFridge




 
 
    
 

Post Thu, Dec 30 2021, 9:23 am
Man am I curious!
New black eye? Remind me about the old black eye.
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amother
Cadetblue


 

Post Thu, Dec 30 2021, 9:27 am
Did the guard physically beat her?

Why didnā€™t she press the ā€œpanic buttonā€ the Rebbetzin gave her?

OP you canā€™t leave us hanging like this for long.
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amother
OP


 

Post Thu, Dec 30 2021, 11:31 am
The outline of this section included the resolution of this crisis, but when I was writing it out it was taking a long time and turned out to be fairly long too. So I ended up splitting it.

Iā€™ll try to work on the rest soon!
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amother
Jetblack


 

Post Thu, Dec 30 2021, 7:14 pm
Oh my!! We need the rest of this please!!
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amother
Cognac


 

Post Thu, Dec 30 2021, 8:21 pm
OP I understand its Thursday night and all that, but can you give us just 1 more paragraph so we can go into Shabbos in peace?
Cliffhangers can be dangerous.
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amother
OP


 

Post Thu, Dec 30 2021, 8:39 pm
amother [ Cognac ] wrote:
OP I understand its Thursday night and all that, but can you give us just 1 more paragraph so we can go into Shabbos in peace?
Cliffhangers can be dangerous.

Fair enough. Will try a little later tonight bli neder if bedtime ever ends!
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amother
Cognac


 

Post Thu, Dec 30 2021, 9:03 pm
amother [ OP ] wrote:
Fair enough. Will try a little later tonight bli neder if bedtime ever ends!


You rock. Thank you!
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amother
RosePink


 

Post Fri, Dec 31 2021, 1:03 am
amother [ OP ] wrote:
Fair enough. Will try a little later tonight bli neder if bedtime ever ends!

How's bedtime? Tongue Out Tongue Out Tongue Out
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amother
OP


 

Post Fri, Dec 31 2021, 1:25 am
amother [ RosePink ] wrote:
How's bedtime? Tongue Out Tongue Out Tongue Out

If you count a 3-year-old drawing pictures at 11:30 pm to be endearing instead of infuriating, it was a smashing success!

Posting the next few paragraphs momentarily Smile
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amother
OP


 

Post Fri, Dec 31 2021, 1:26 am
NEXT TIME

"Chava, tell me what happened!" Eli repeats frantically.

He doesn't give her a chance to answer, though, getting a cold pack for her eye and making sure that her nose isn't broken.

Chava herself is remarkably calm. She cooperates without protest.

When the bleeding stops to Eli's satisfaction, she explains.

"You know the guards only let us have 20 minutes. But this girl I was taking, it turns out that she has a water phobia. She was really scared to go in. I told her not to worry, that she could take her time, I offered to take off my socks and go down the steps with her if that made her more comfortable.

"She finally managed to toivel, but she was shaking the whole time. I felt so bad.

"Of course it took much longer than 20 minutes.

"When we came out, the guard was really angry. He started yelling at us for abusing the privilege, and threatening never to let anyone use the mikvah.

"I tried to apologize to defuse the situation, but apparently that was the wrong thing to do.

"Without any warning, he punched me in the face. I screamed, the other girl screamed, and another guard came running. He asked if I'm okay. Then he sent the other guard to take a walk outside, and brought us both back to our apartments."

"Was this second guard black by any chance?"

"Yes he was, why?"

"I figured. It's not important right now. But Chava, why on earth didn't you use the alert bracelet?"

"It all happened too fast. By the time I could have pressed it, the whole thing was over. It wasn't even on, remember?"

"Not very helpful then."

"I know, but next time I couldā€”"

Eli stands up. "What are you talking about? There will be no next time!"

Chava stares at him. "Eli, what are YOU talking about? Of course there will be. There's nobody else that can do it."

"You can't put yourself in danger!"

"Yes I can, for something important."

"No you cannot! I am your husband!"

"And I am your wife. But I am making a unilateral decision here. We got married on this principle. Women have chopped ice and gone to the Mikvah in a Siberian river. I'm willing to risk a black eye for the mitzvah."

Eli puts his head in his hands.

Finally he looks up. "You win. But I expect you to make me sandwiches this week."

"Sandwiches?" Chava is confused.

"With three kinds of chocolate spread."



To be continued...
ETA: Continued here
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gr82no




 
 
    
 

Post Fri, Dec 31 2021, 2:03 am
Awesome! Ty:)
I guess Iā€™ll have to deal with this kind of cliffhanger. Canā€™t wait for more!
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amother
Lemonlime


 

Post Fri, Dec 31 2021, 4:53 am
OP this is Chabad right? Noticed shemtov there:)
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Oldest




 
 
    
 

Post Fri, Dec 31 2021, 9:07 am
Just found this story, an WOW op!!! You are really talented!!!! I am completely hooked and can't wait for the next installment!!
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Cookiegirl




 
 
    
 

Post Fri, Dec 31 2021, 10:13 am
Well done, OP! You are really talented...I hope this gets published somewhere
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amother
Cognac


 

Post Fri, Dec 31 2021, 11:08 am
Yay!! Thank you OP for your dedication. This kind of cliffhanger is much less dangerous and we can go into Shabbos in peace.

Good Shabbos!!
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amother
Azure


 

Post Sun, Jan 02 2022, 12:33 am
is there a kind soul who can find the "episode" which describes exactly how this living situation came to be? I know it was an experiment of isolating people from the rest of the world but I'd like to reread the details. And I don't have the time to look through 16 pages for it.
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amother
OP


 

Post Sun, Jan 02 2022, 12:34 am
amother [ Azure ] wrote:
is there a kind soul who can find the "episode" which describes exactly how this living situation came to be? I know it was an experiment of isolating people from the rest of the world but I'd like to reread the details. And I don't have the time to look through 16 pages for it.

Prologue is at the link in the first post of the thread: https://www.imamother.com/foru.....67522
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Dandelion21




 
 
    
 

Post Sun, Jan 02 2022, 1:30 am
Wow OP
Your insanely talented. This is was soooo good. Can't wait to continue reading
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